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[nonionay]

Last night I hacked off the first five pages of tBRD to evaluate them for workshopping next weekend. Scene 1 hadn't changed since the smut version. Scene 2 is awesome. I pondered the theory that this was imply because Ianto is so damn awesome that of course his intro scene (Scene 2) would be the shit. But why can't Bree in Scene 1 also be The Shit? The Dead Perverts read it and told me she was boring. I'm not sure I can make her The Shit in the first scene, but I hope I can at least make her interesting.

Looking at the scenes side by side makes me realize how much I've grown in just six months.

Comments

[kaerfel.livejournal.com]

You have improved a lot in the last six months. I'm impressed. ;)

[csinman.livejournal.com]

I would like to stress that Bree herself is not boring, because when you asked me to describe her, I could at least passably do it. People who have BAFCS (Boring-Ass Female Character Syndrome) don't have characters I can describe. It's just that we don't get to see her shining the way Ianto did--he stole the show. He should show up as an amusing supporting act. I'll read the pages and see if I can come up with anything.